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Nick Winney's avatar

Oh...just a thought about the title..

"Actually" is...an adverb right... ending in "LY"? 😉

cut it? Title is punchier without it and fits Nick's voice better?

imho

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Emil Ottoman's avatar

However, I needed that smile this morning.

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Emil Ottoman's avatar

Oh, editor jokes. I heart them. STET! Even I believe there is a time and place for adverbs, just, not everywhere all the time forever.

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Nick Winney's avatar

stet is a word i use all the time when arguing contract amendments. i was hoping you'd like the little joke 😀

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Nick Winney's avatar

Great stuff! Absolutely Great! we need more nuclear horror...it could come soon for real.

You wrote me just almosy POIFICT my friend. I would absolutely end the suffering of that poor sweet child.

but... i'd have let her finish the creme brulee man...that was cruel. mercy dont needs to be cruel.

I assume Nick is me, right?

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Joely's avatar

I just need to remind you of how good this shit was/is.

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Mike Knittel's avatar

That was damn good.

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Emil Ottoman's avatar

Thanks. I’d do the proper thing and feign modesty, but my impostor syndrome has flipped off for five seconds so, yeah, I know, I’ve been writing and studying craft for 20 years and I’m a paid editor, if it wasn’t good I’d have to go stick my head in an oven.

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Mike Knittel's avatar

This is far too realistic Emil, and I resent you for it. Now I'm forced to remove these images from my mind before I fall asleep lest I dream of the skin melting off my face. Damn you

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Emil Ottoman's avatar

Thank you again, mission achieved.

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Joely's avatar

Impressive.. Very nice. Let's see Paul Allen's Faust. - Benny Netanyahu

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Edith Bow's avatar

I loved how desolate and dystopian it was and the unexpected ending. Beautiful.

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Emil Ottoman's avatar

Thank you. I do remember that I wrote this when I worked at a radiochemistry lab though. So being irradiated was always on my mind. God, that place was dystopian. OK, at least it all fits.

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